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Date With Death
My heart was pounding. I couldn’t wait to meet “my mystery man.” My soul had yearned for this day. I had replayed our first date over and over in my mind. “Don’t be so rigid!” I chided myself. Suddenly there he was. I instantly recognised him from his pictures. He looked rough, yet his blue eyes twinkled in the fading light. A grin creased his rugged features Then he spoke, “I’ve been waiting for this day for a long, long time he drawled.” Then he said something that gave me the chills. “Don’t take your life so seriously. It isn’t permanent.” My mind reeled. What did he mean by that?
His voice was as smooth as butter, when he called my name ‘Jamie, Jamie’, suddenly I snapped out of my daze. My mum Wendy, was calling my name, ‘Jamie, your dad will be home soon, from the Police Department. He has had a long day, and the least you can do is set the table.” I stomped to the kitchen and gave my mum a disgruntled look, “If you don’t be careful the wind will change” she said looking at me with a grin. It made me smirk, and reluctantly I did as I was told. I had just finished when my father walked through the door. I ran up to him and gave him a hug “How was work dad? Did you catch any baddies”, “Yup, we finally caught the man who was stealing all the donuts from the fridge.” He grinned. We all sat at the dining table and ate our dinner, I ate as fast as I could, scoffing everything, because I had a date. This wasn’t a regular date. It was the most important day of my life! I had been chatting to a boy online for the past few months, who was now practically my best friend. His name was Brad. We have never met, but tonight was the night my dream would become a reality. I had been longing for this moment for what seems like a lifetime now.

We hugged and smiled. He was everything I had hoped for. We started walking and talking about life. We strolled to a romantic spot in the meadow for a moonlight picnic. Then his eyes innocent blue eyes turned dark as if they had been possessed by a monster. He snarled “Didn’t your parents ever tell you not to talk to strangers?” I was confused. Adrenalin surged through my body, as I remembered my father watching the news mumbling to himself “I don’t understand how they could release him. He’s a murderer! I put him away for a reason.” I recalled his face on the television.
I exclaimed “You?” He sneered. “You’re that Brad Collins! You murdered your girlfriend!” A smirk spread across his face, “Haha pretty and smart. We could have had something real, if it wasn’t for the fact of wanting to kill you because of your father. He put me in jail for twenty years. I was an innocent man and no one believed me. I warned your father that when I got out, I would get revenge. I’m a man who likes to follow through with his plans.”………..
“Jamie, what plans had Brad made?” the Constable asked, interrupting my thoughts. I just stared at him as I went back to that horrible night. I asked him what he was going to do. He replied “Pay Back!” He grabbed me and bound my hands together behind my back. He put a blindfold over my eyes so I couldn’t see where he was taking me. Then slung me over his shoulder and carried me to a shed. I listened out for sounds, so I could remember for every minute it took, to get to my present location, like Liam Neeson did in Taken 2. One minute – the lake, two minutes – baby birds squawking, three minutes – hay baler is working, four minutes – dogs barking. I did this so if I escaped, I could find my way back to show the police where I was held captive. Then something hit my head. I felt sharp pain. I was knocked out.
I was awoken by icy cold water being poured over my face. My clothes were saturated. I could feel that I was strapped to a chair. As I looked into Brads cold eyes I could already tell that I wasn’t going to get out of here. “How did u manage to escape Jamie” the constable said with an intrigued face. “I had followed my fathers rule, never go anywhere without a knife”
When Brad had left me in the shed by myself felt around in my back pocket for my pocket knife to cut to rope, I finally got it undone. I heard him coming back so I quickly grabbed the hardest thing I could find, luckily for me it was a rock, I stood next to the door waiting, as he opened the door and his head was in my presence I struck him in the head, knocking him unconscious, I dragged him and heaved him onto the chair and tied him up and bound his arms. I ran as fast as I could, I had to retrace the sounds, 4minutes – dogs barking, but I couldn’t find any except for some fieces, which I was hoping were dog ones so I ran in that direction, and there it was 3minutes – a hay baler straight in front of me so I knew I was close, 2minutes – baby birds squawking, at this point I was completely out of breath but I knew I couldn’t stop and then 1minute – the lake, I finally got to it. I followed the lake up stream to where Brad had parked his car, fortunately Brad isn’t as smart as he thinks it is and left his keys in the car. That is how I escaped my date with death.

Creative writing plan

1. Name your characters: brad, Jamie
2. What situation are they facing? You have been chatting online with this man you think is your true love
3. Why is this a problem? You have never met him
4. Will you put in a twist? What twist will it be? Yes , the guy she is meeting is a mass murderer who has just gotten out of jail
5. How will this problem solve itself/ be solved? Not sure yet

6. What ending will you try to achieve? She breaks free and is saved
7. Will you start your story with the ending or the beginning? Ending

Plan: Jamie, just an ordinary teenager with an ordinary family, her dad a police officer, her mum, a stay at home mum who cooks and cleans and she has, a normal life. But every family has there secrets, around 20 years ago, Jamie’s father Michael, put a boy in a juvenile detention centre for the charge of murdering his girlfriend, although pleading guilty evidence suggested otherwise so he was sent to jail, if it wasn’t for his age he would of had a date with the needle, on that day Brad promised he would take revenge when he got out. 20 years later michaels daughter Jamie, meets on a dating website a man she thinks is her true love, who she has planned to meet next week. Little does Jamie know, the man she is going to meet has been planning this moment longer than she realises.

Jamie’s pov: My names Jamie, I’m 18 years old and I have met the most amazing guy ever on the internet. We have been chatting online for 4 months now, we talk about everything together he knows more about me than my best friends do, we have finally decided to meet up next week for our 4 month anniversary.

Brads pov: finally I’m getting out in a week, our plan has worked, she has no idea what she’s getting herself into. I’ve been waiting for this moment for over 20 years. Her father thinks he can throw me in jail just like that, he’s got another thing coming.

To provide creative writing based on conflict and resolution

Learning intention – to produce creative writing based on conflict and resolution

Success criteria – you will be able to

•develop ideas – this means I will ….. Your reflection to show your understanding
•structure ideas – this means I will
•use language features appropriately – this means I will …..
•I know that my writing audience (who will read my work) is my peers and my teachers
•I know that the purpose of my writing is to show (by using features) how a character can overcome a conflict in their life told through a piece of creative writing

Planning –
1. Name your characters
2. What situation are they facing? You’ve been in a relationship for a few months and your ready to take it to the next level
3. Why is this a problem? Because it’s scary
4. Will you put in a twist? What twist will it be? Yes when u tell her that you are ready she turns round and whispers in my ear, I’m a dude
5. How will this problem solve itself/ be solved? You break it off with him because you are disgusted
6. What ending will you try to achieve? A happy one, because the man would of found a girl, who is actually a girl
7. Will you start your story with the ending or the beginning? beginning

New Zealand and the Welfare State

•What is poverty – it means being poor, millions of people are subjected to poverty

•Who is to blame for poverty – people and countries, because if people didn’t waste there money on not important thing, like weapons and makeup ect all that money could go towards the people in poverty.

•Should society/government take responsibility for the poor – yes because lots of the things they spend there money on isn’t that important and a waste so if they gave it to countries with poverty lots of lives would be saved. They need the help of others eg society and governments because they have no way on getting out?

Definitions –
•Poverty – being very poor
•Casual Labour – where a worker is employed when needed, they don’t have a particular schedule
•Sweated Trades – workers work for long hours, for barely any money and poor conditions
•Social reformers – they are people who try to solve social problems
•Universal support –
•Welfare State – a system whereby the state undertakes to protect the health and well-being of its citizens, especially those in financial or social need, by means of grants, pensions, and other benefits

What did New Zealand do to improve the lives of the poor before 1935
•they were the first country to supply a state-funded old age pension
•In 1924, pensions were instituted for the blind

Explain how fair and effective you think it’s actions were
•it wasn’t really fair because it strongly discriminated against those considered to be ‘the undeserving poor’. For example, anyone who had been convicted of criminal or drunken offences more than twice within the seven years before applying for the pension were not eligible. So it’s effectiveness made it so there was a difference between people 1 being deserving and the other undeserving.

Should New Zealand be proud of what it did to help the poor before 1935? Give at least one reason to support your thoughts.
•No because they barely did anything the only thing they did was give out a pension to old people and widows (mainly with children) but they weren’t the only people who were poor.

My static image commentary

We studied ‘Lord of the Flies’ so I have chosen to produce a poster about the idea of ‘Evil in Everyone’. I’m going to use the quote ‘“Maybe there is a beast?..What I mean is… maybe it’s only us.’ to reinforce my visual idea.
The purpose of this poster is to shock the viewer and is suitable for an audience of teenagers to adults.

My dominant images are of half the face of Jack on the right hand side, while the other half of the face represents the beast. The colours I’ve chosen are a black and white background for Jack and a red background for the beast. Jacks face portrays normality and innocence while the black and white behind him symbolises the evil taking over the good, inside him. The beast is grey and black, with a red eye and a red background showing the anger, evil and fury that it presents.

The lettering ‘Something Strange’ designed by Jonathan S. Harris. I chose this font because it looks spooky, evil, and like dripping blood. This evokes the feeling of fear! The font is in black which accentuates death because all innocence has died. It is bold and in capitals which makes it aloud statement ‘shouts’ and gets the viewers attention.

The texture I have chosen is thick black and red card, representing the thickness of the darkness and the congealing of blood. This reinforces the image of when Simon was murdered because he was mistaken as the beast.

The layout I have chosen is on an A3 poster size to create visual impact the faces are proportionally balanced in the centre of the page to make this a dominant feature.

The shape I have chosen is of half a human face representing normality while the other half of the face represents the beast with a red eye and horn representing incredible evil.